about diagram of dislocation #1 and #2

After meditating about the intention of my two written pieces (composed after original sentences of Jeffrey Gettleman in his article 'Symbol of Unhealed Congo: Male Rape Victims' published in the New York on August 4th, 2009 and Alyssa J. Rubin's in 'How Baida Wanted to Die' published in the NYTimes as well, on August 12th, 2009) for a couple of months or so, I came to conceive the permutations of their structure, and their capacity of being translated into graphic models as 'diagrams of dislocation.' Why?
After originally thinking that the main idea was the impact that could produce (or not) in the audience, bringing the uneasiness or acceptance of every formulation (strained gender identities, religious connotations, the heaviness of the tragic and the absurdity of the comical, application of psychological or linguistic models, etc.) the idea of the subtraction (or alienation) of the subject, according to conditions socially or self-imposed, came to represent the most significative issue I wanted to deal with. In order to do that, I came to describe (as far as I am capable of) the subjects as 'dislocated' from their everyday contexts, taking these dislocations as the genesis of the pieces that, unfortunately, are not extensive enough as to create a sophisticated narrative, limiting themselves to the aftermath of some particular event that triggered the present conditions, expressed in the original (that I would like to refer as) aphorisms.
When researching for the term, I came to extensive papers that deal with it in Geoscience and Materials Science, that I intend to interpret in the construction of my own diagrams of dislocation. I would like to explore the notion of the closeness of discourse (I hesitate about 'discourse' being the right concept, other candidates would be dialectic, language and semantics, which shows in what a primeval state this project is) and applied sciences. I pretend to construct on the possibilities of these pieces being extrapolated from a syntactic realm. This is merely playful and doesn't sustain any scientific determination. So far this is what I know and want to do, and hopefully, something interesting will come out of it.